 
					
							Sultan_of_your_Fantasies
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		Mommy, Sonny And a Voyeur V-2
	
	
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					 Gora
	
	
		 5384 days ago
				Gora
	
	
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				 5855 days ago
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 Gora
	
	
		 5384 days ago
				Gora
	
	
		 5384 days ago
	
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				Great series.. I have read them from the beginning.. I can honestly say I don't care much for the Blake & Justin acts... But I take the good with the bad. I would really like to see one centered on Meg and her Son alone though.. Perhaps their alone time a
				
		
	
	
	
	
		Sick day with sisters
	
	
	
	
		
			
			
		
		
												
										
				This wasn't a story... It was a series of half assed slapped together paragraphs... Not horribly written, but then again niether are someof those who use english as a second languade... you are about 5 paragraphs of detail short of this being a Story thou
				
		
	
	
	
	
		Sick day with sisters
	
	
	
	
		
			
			
		
		
												
										
				This wasn't a story... It was a series of half assed slapped together paragraphs... Not horribly written, but then again niether are some of those who use english as a second language... you are about 5 paragraphs of detail short of this being a Story tho
				
		
	
	
	
	
		Danny's birthday
	
	
	
	
		
			
			
		
		
												
										
				I know it's your story, and its the best I've read in this category in a while. Congrats and well done for taking the time to write a story so well put together and so awesomely detailed. My request is this... 
Definitely write a Sequel. I know many of t
	Definitely write a Sequel. I know many of t
	
	
	
		Finally, she's mine...
	
	
	
	
		
			
			
		
		
												
										
				Well, forced or rape is sure as hell the wrong category for this story. I mean come on she was willing the moment he kissed her... As far as the grammatical errors... Nothing a little proof reading wouldn't cure... maybe some coaching perhaps. I Have cert
				
		
	
	
	
	
		Hot Mother
	
	
	
	
		
			
			
		
		
												
										
				A few grammatical errors but nothing a careful proof reading wouldn't fix. Otherwise, Well Done!
				
		
	
	
	
	
		My fun with my sister
	
	
	
	
		
			
			
		
		
												
										
				EVERY GODDAMN ONE OF YOU SHORT STORY, NON SPELLING, ZERO EDITING BASTARDS ARE FIRED. THIS IS A SHORT STORY SITE NOT A SITE FOR PARAGRAPHS ON STICKY NOTES!
				
		
	
	
	
	
		My fun with my sister
	
	
	
	
		
			
			
		
		
												
										
				EVERY GODDAMN ONE OF YOU SHORT STORY, NON SPELLING, ZERO EDITING BASTARDS ARE FIRED. THIS IS A SHORT STORY SITE NOT A SITE FOR PARAGRAPHS ON STICKY NOTES!
				
		
	
	
	
	
		My fun with my sister
	
	
	
	
		
			
			
		
		
												
										
				EVERY GODDAMN ONE OF YOU SHORT STORY, NON SPELLING, ZERO EDITING BASTARDS ARE FIRED. THIS IS A SHORT STORY SITE NOT A SITE FOR PARAGRAPHS ON STICKY NOTES!
				
		
	
	
	
	
		My First Babysitting Job
	
	
	
	
		
			
			
		
		
												
										
				Well done... But I agree. You need to add a lot more detail, More Paragraphs and punctuation. There were few minor spelling and grammar points, so take a few minutes to edit your own work before submitting it. But all in all I loved it. You have a good im
				
		
	
	
	
	
		Elena
	
	
	
	
		
			
			
		
		
												
										
				Ok.. not bad written, But... What the Same hell did this story have to do with incest? And  what kind of a stopping point was that? That's not a cliffhanger stopping point. That's a piss your reader's off and n0ot make them want to continue stopping point
				
		
	
	
	
	
		Freakin' Hot Cousin
	
	
	
	
		
			
			
		
		
											
												
										
				Can I get a what... WhaT in the hell ever possessed you to write this story in such an abnoxiously annoying manner? I mean seriously all the notes? All the T-R-u-t-h-o-r-d-a-r-e-.... and the R and M... Come on.. the story had great thought but any comedyt
				
		
	