 
					
							Ronboy
							Member Since October 19, 2009
						
													
											
	
	
	
		Photo Shoot Pt2
	
	
	
	
		
			
			
		
		
												
										
				"he said, she said" is silly.  A fairly good story but learn how to write dialogue.
				
		
	
	
	
	
		HomeWork
	
	
	
	
		
			
			
		
		
												
										
				Hey, Mr. Colman, you got this story off another site.  Now I realize the stories are somewhat "public domain" but it is not nice to plagerize.  I wrote the story and created the Evans Family 4 yrs ago.
				
		
	
	
	
	
		My New Neighbors - 1
	
	
	
	
		
			
			
		
		
												
										
				Very well written and very exciting.  Keep up the good writing.
				
		
	
	
	
	
		The painter and my sleeping sister
	
	
	
	
		
			
			
		
		
												
										
				Good story and plot.  However a bit hard to follow with the limited paragraphing.  I read the whole story.
				
		
	
	
	
	
		Exposing little sister
	
	
	
	
		
			
			
		
		
											
												
										
				Fairly well written.  Good description and a very good plot.  I enjoyed reading it.
				
		
	

'he said she said' distracts from an otherwise great story.