Jillicious
Member Since October 19, 2009
Alone for the weekend
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naughty_girl2
5384 days ago
Jillicious
5855 days ago
naughty_girl2
5384 days ago
Jillicious
5855 days ago
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It is a good story. However, it is like reading one long run on paragraph. You could use some line breaks and paragraph separation. Also it would be "waist", not "waste". It would be "to" not "too". Just touch it up a bit and that would make it great.