Goz
Member Since October 19, 2009
Do You Want The Job?
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Crazykid
5383 days ago
Goz
5855 days ago
Crazykid
5383 days ago
Goz
5855 days ago
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too short, no detail
Kim Possble
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jdi
jdi
Err, story might be O.K put bad grammer and puncuation along with using u got you spoils it
The misadventure of homeless marvin
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melatonin
melatonin
Might be agood story if it was readable, ever hear of paragraphs?
date rape
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stanstan
stanstan
The storys's not bad but your pucnuation detracts from it. The initial penetration is a bit quick, take your time when you write and read the stroy through a few times checking for context, grammer and puncuation.
Erik, My Dad's Friend
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Hush
Hush
Good job. You have a gift for telling a story. 1 gripe, could you spellcheck your stories before hand? Something silly like bad spelling can detract from a good story.
Becky's Babysitter
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Jolly1
Jolly1
Some of the best stuff on the net. Well written, great story and smoking hot!