BaggerDax
Member Since October 19, 2009
Trampoline Flasher
by
petookh
5383 days ago
BaggerDax
5855 days ago
petookh
5383 days ago
BaggerDax
5855 days ago
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10
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I rate it '0' for one reason...No fucking white spaces! You need to use PARAGRAPHS and at LEAST one line of WHITE Space...Most people, myself included, won't even read a run-together story like this...It's hard on the eyes...Plus...You had to have learned
Getting home a lil late
by
college_slut
college_slut
You uncouth prick! This story was submitted to XNXX.com by Worik Brown... You fucking stole it! You ought to be banned from this site! Submit your plagiarized stories somewhere else!
Summer Of 61
by
kwvagabond
kwvagabond
I gave it one star, only because there's no place for 0 (Zero) Stars...Did you ever go to school? It's a real strain on the eyes to read a story formatted in one, ling, single, fucking paragraph! I won't even rread it because of that!
GO back to school o
GO back to school o
Tracy gets her brother 3
by
babyoil1975
babyoil1975
You have the right touch for this kind of writing! HOWEVER, you had the formatting (Paragraphs) down in Part 1: what the hell happened in Parts 2 & 3???? It really strains the eyes when a person has to read the story in one, long, continual, paragraph! Fi
Traci gets her Bother Pt12
by
babyoil1975
babyoil1975
Excellent story! I only rated it 5 stars, NOT because of the story itself, but because of some inconsistencies:
-You've written in the 'future' tense, as-well-as the 'past' tense...a little distracting but not overly so!
-You've spelled 'Traci' 2 wa
-You've written in the 'future' tense, as-well-as the 'past' tense...a little distracting but not overly so!
-You've spelled 'Traci' 2 wa
Traci gets her Bother Pt12
by
babyoil1975
babyoil1975
Please forgive the mistake in my review...I meant it to be 4 stars, NOT 1...Jerry
PYASI TEACHER
by
ashish
ashish
I'm sure it's a good story, but you've made one fatal mistake! What book have you ever read that contained no paragraphs with white spaces between them? It's really hard on the eyes to read a story like this with everything run-together. Maybe you could c
PYASI TEACHER
by
ashish
ashish
Great story, man!!! I'd like to see a continuation... Keep up the good work!
The Principal's Office Part 1: Erica
by
bballbluepizza
bballbluepizza
What? Was your mommy wlaking up the stairs and calling you? You had to finish it in a hurry? Slow it down and build-up to the sex.The whole story was over in 3 seconds! --Jerry
PS...Look for a job as something else!
PS...Look for a job as something else!
My redheaded neighbor
by
thechaseter
thechaseter
Your story is decent but DAMN! Are you aware of the 'shift' key? It's used to capitalize letters when you type; Try it out sometime! No caps makes for hard reading - eye strain!
My Mother( MY $100 WHORE) PT. 3
by
gharper
gharper
Who the hell are you... I don't see ANY of YOUR stories in here, an yet you TRASH everybody else's... GET A LIFE, YOU JERK! Maybe someone needs to putitinYOURbutt
Ashley, I cant help it
by
BCskaterpunk992
BCskaterpunk992
What is it with you people? Listen...PARAGRAPHS! SINGLE LINE WHITE SPACES! PARAGRAPHS! SINGLE LINE WHITE SPACES! PARAGRAPHS! SINGLE LINE WHITE SPACES! PARAGRAPHS! - Try writing like in a book...you know...surely you learned SOMETHING in Eglish 101! One st
Lucy
by
Lloyd12
Lloyd12
If they'd had a sign for '0', that's what I'd have rated it! Try using capital letters and using more paragraphs to seperate changes of subject...Did you pass English in school?
Audition Tape
by
hillarysmuff
hillarysmuff
Not a bad story at all, but try using paragraphs...One continual line makes for more difficult reading...
What Was I Thinking?
by
bobm14220
bobm14220
Were you high when you wrote this? What's with all the question marks... tracers? Be sure you don't give-up your daytime job to be an author!
Cousins 1
by
gen_man69
gen_man69
I gave you 1 star because you didn't seperate paragraphs with 'white spaces'! It may be a really good story, but I don't know; I didn't read it! Surely you learned about paragraphs in school...
Having one continual text makes stories VERY HARD TO READ!
Having one continual text makes stories VERY HARD TO READ!
My Incest Girl
by
Blackroses
Blackroses
I know that you can use paragrphs to seperate thoughts and actions...you actually used a few! But damn, why the l o n g paragraphs with no breaks? That makes reading stories a real strain on the eyes! Break those suckers up! If you'd like for me to 'e
My Daughter Lisa and her friend Anna Part 1
by
davehh39
davehh39
You definately have the talent, but there's something you need to change...Use paragrtaphs! It strains the eyes for the whole story to be ONE, SINGLE, FUCKING, PARAGRAPH!
Babysitting becomes interesting
by
Jerimiah40
Jerimiah40
A '3' because...You need to use blank spaces (read: 1 or 2) between paragraphs...Most books don't use blank spaces between paragraphs, but on computer screens, it's different...Otherwise, a very good story!
Playing House with my Cousin
by
FilthyDirtyOne
FilthyDirtyOne
Why did you write part one in a first person narrative, and the second part in a third person narrative...The story is fairly decent, but you need to work on consistency...I give it a 3.